[Yoojun K] Writing Practice Test 974988

The bar chart is displaying the changes on the location of people's bitrh, whether they were born in cities, towns, or rural areas. The bar graph is comparing Austrailia and the land outside of it.

In 1995, the highest proportion of people born in Australia was in cities, reaching 50%. The least proportion of people born in Australia was in towns, which is 20%, having less than half of people born in cities. The rates of people born in rural areas of Australia was 30%, which was between that of people born in Australian towns and people born in Australian cities.

Similarly, people born in cities outside of the Australia also was the highest proportion, having 60%. Likewise, the possibilities of people born in towns outside of Australia was the least, marking approximately 10%. The rates of people born in rural areas outside of Australia was 40%, which was between that of people born in towns and cities outside of Australia.

In 2010, however, the number of people born in Australian cities increased by 10%, reaching 60%. The number of people born in towns or rural areas of Australia, however, were reduced, having less than 20%. The number of people born in rural lands outside of Australia, interestingly dropped to less than 10%.

Generally, it is evident that both Australia and outside land shares similarities. The similarities between two lands were relatively stable, except the fact that number of people born in rural land of outside was less than that of people born in time in 2010, compared to 1995.

When I was walking the street of my college campus, I often heard my fellow students expressing how financial aid is not supporting poor countries effectively. I found that people state the importance of financial aid to poor countries, while others argue that other actions must be done to support them. I do agree that some other helps are necessary. Regardless, I believe that financial aids are still in need.

Despite the fact that people are questioning the effectiveness of financial aids, it is undeniable that a lot of poor countries need financial aids to combat the poverty. The amount of money developing countries possess, in fact, is so lacking that people are starving and not able to educate themselves. As a person who visited poor countries for volunteers, I was able to witness the severness of poverty. The life of people in there was so different. What we considered as the basic needs, including fresh water and tidy meals, were surprisingly rare in there. In addition, the infrastructures were so fragile that it could be broken at any moment. Financial aids, therefore, must be implemented to support them.

Regardless, people have to keep in mind that there's another help that should be conducted by developed countries. I believe that developed company should send insector to check whether the financial aid is actually being used to support the people in need. This is due to the fact that some of poor countries' governments are corrupted. In fact, corrupted government is considered as one of the significant reason why poor countries are still suffering through poverty, and this unfortunate circumstances are still ongoing in some places. There is a chance that corrupted leaders of poor countries to exploit the financial aids for their own goods, rather than using it to support people who are struggling. In order to prevent budget waste and actually improve the life standards of poor country, I strongly suggest deploying inspector to ensure the

In sum, I believe that financial aid is still necessary support to poor countries. Nevertheless, there should be a another job to be done. In order to prevent corrupted governments to take advantage of it, credible people or agents should be sent to look over them.