IELTS Mock Test 2023 June Writing Practice Test 1

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Do you think if you eat healthy food and stay in bed at all times, try to move as little as possible you would stay fit? No, Right!
In the same way, a person becomes overweight by a series of factors contributing to its effects, rather than just one. While the price might be a determining factor for some, for others it is the crunch of time and lack of ability to cook that leads them to choose unhealthier options. It is always easier to walk into a KFC and just order a bucket of wings (since it is readily available) than to cook by yourself, do the preparation, and then clean the dishes. Our diet is supposed to be a fair mix of proteins, fibers, carbohydrates, and fats. Eliminating anyone can cause serious repercussions leading to an imbalance of hormones and vitamins.
We can classify people here in two sets, to understand the effect of increasing the price of fattening foods. Firstly, the people who choose to go for readily available food options because they don't have time, are the people who are working in corporates, have tight deadlines, and are on a very short break. The increase in price won't affect their choice because for them time is of the essence. Secondly, comes the set who have to go to a fast food chain because they cannot afford the luxury of having or cooking organic & healthy foods. For them, the increase in price will negatively affect their budget hence impacting their ability to feed themselves.
Therefore, I do not stand with the proposition of inflating the price point of fattening foods. Rather, we should look for other options, one of which could be to decrease the membership costs of the gym or to educate people about obesity and train them to take up do-it-at-home exercises. It takes a very long time for our body to break down the fats accumulated by the fattening agents present in our food but we can train our metabolism to work faster by maintaining a healthy lifestyle. If adequately coupled with exercise, being overweight can be avoided and you can still have your favourite food at the same price.

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The displayed pie chart and table inform four types of tourists from different nationalities, how long they spend, accommodation types, and their activities during their holiday in Australia. 

Overall, most of the visitors to Australia are from Asia and Europe. While the smallest portion of visitors come from other countries. Additionally, guests from Europe stay longer than other tourists. On the other hand, Asian tourists who make up the majority, stay the shortest in Australia.

To begin with, the biggest proportion of tourists who come to Australia are Asians who make up 37% of the total tourists, followed by Europe with 35%. While guests from the US have 18% which is higher than the proportion from other countries with only 10%.

However, according to the table, the largest population of tourists which is dominated by Asians only stays for 7 days, while American and European tourists choose to stay about 14 days and 16 days, and the rest of the tourists from other countries prefer to stay about 10 days.

Moreover, Asian and American tourists like to stay in 5-star and 4-star hotels which give them a comfortable rest during the holiday, and prefer to spend their main time sightseeing. Meanwhile, Europeans and the rest of the tourists enjoy the holiday in a caravan or camp. Different from Asians and Americans, Europeans prefer to spend their main time swimming or sunbathing and the rest of the tourist prefer to surf to spend their holiday.

The pie chart illustrates the percentage of tourist from all over the world who travelled to Australia for vacation and the tale descries the average number of days they spent, their accommodation and main activities they enjoyed.
The US and Europe had the largest percentage of people who travelled by 37% and 35% respectively, followed by Asia which was 18% and few people from other regions made 10% of the total percentage.
Asian tourists while on vacation in Australia, enjoyed sight seeing and stayed an average of 7 days in a 5 star hotel. The Europeans preferred camping , they engaged in swimming and sunbathing and stayed at least 16 days on the trip. The Americans resided in a 4 star hotel in Australia for about 14 days and their most enjoyed activity was sight seeing. Travelers from other various areas, stayed in Australia for a minimum of 10 days, and enjoyed surfing.

The pie chart and the graph give information about the percentage of tourists from different parts of the world and their lifestyle choices during their stay at a particular holiday resort in Australia.
The pie chart indicates that more than two-thirds of the total visitors belong to Asia and Europe. Furthermore, 18% of the visitors are from America while 10% are from the rest of the world.
On the other hand, the graph shows that European tourists spend on average 16 days on vacation while American visitors spend two weeks. however Asian people spend the least amount of time (in comparison) only 7 days. While Asian and American tourists prefer to stay in 5-star and 4-star hotels respectively, Europeans and tourists from other parts of the globe chose camping or caravan modes of accommodation.
Talking about the main activity during the stay, American and Asian visitors spent most of their time sightseeing. In contrast, European tourists preferred swimming and sunbathing. Tourists from other regions choose to surf in their time.

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