Topic: People living in big cities face several problems. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller town?
Nowadays, the majority of world population is living in urban areas. While many people associate city life with prosperity, urban dwellers actually have to experience various difficulties, including crime and environmental pollution. From my perspective, governments should use counter-urbanization as a measure to ease the aforementioned problems.
One of the common issues with living in a city is crime. For a violent crime to occur, there must be a culprit and a victim. In a highly populated area, the risk of encountering a mob is much higher than that of a small town. Additionally, if the culprit feels protected by the anonymity that a large city provides, he may commit more wrongdoings. Furthermore, air pollution is also a prevalent issue in major cities. Surface transportation is the main source of greenhouse gas emissions, which cause respiratory problems to the people. This problem is exacerbated by the sheer number of vehicles commuting daily in the city.
In my opinion, to tackle both the issues above, governments should promote the migration from urban areas to rural ones. As the population density of a metropolitan area is reduced, so do crimes and air pollution. However, city dwellers have their reasons to stay in urban places, such as to enjoy education and job opportunities. This is why governments need to step in because only they can introduce rural development policies. If countryside areas have better infrastructures, people will find less incentive to live in big cities.
In conclusion, crime and air pollution are two of the various problems of urban life. I believe that urban-to-rural migration, promoted by governments, is an appropriate solution for those issues.
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(This model essay is written by Anh Tran - an administrator of Let’s Write Something.)
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Topic: People living in big cities face several problems. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller town?
This is a two-part question essay, formed by mixing a cause-solution essay and an opinion essay. Such a question type may appear frequently in the future.
Sample essay band 6.0:
Despite a facilitated lifestyle, the urban populas seems to deal with certain difficulties. This essay will discuss those associateted isseues, and whether or not the governments should promote smaller towns as an alternative for major cities.
Although, the people living in populated areas are able to avail lucrative oppurtunities in fields of education, employment and enterntainment somehow, there are some issues to be dealth with. First of all, the most nototrious is; traffic congestion, as the number of vehicles on roads is increasing, and there is no solution to it yet. Causing air and noise polution, the greatest drivers in manipulating human's mental and physical health. Another worth mentioning worry is, unemployment. As more and more people are leaving their hometowns in search of jobs; the city populas is swelling up day by day.
As far as the government role is concerned, it seems that it could help lessen the problems faced by urban habitants. To illustrate, the authorities should start housing schemes in smaller towns to divert public attention towards smaller towns. Also, providing health and job facilities within one's hometown could persuade people to stay there more. In addition, factories and hospital buildings ahould be moved into remote areas to support rural living.
To conclude, infact people do fantasize about living in larger cities; to dwell among advanced living standards, but when after moving in they have to encounter certain problems. To tackle the situation, government should step in, and design solid schemes to stop urban crawl. It should initiate plans to ease urban inhabitants and inspire them to move into smaller settlements.
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Corrected Essay
Despite a facilitated comfortable lifestyle, the urban populas populace seems to deal with certain difficulties. This essay will discuss those associateted associated isseues issues, and whether or not the governments should promote smaller towns as an alternative for to major cities for citizens.
“Facilitated” isn’t usually used as an adjective, especially when going with “lifestyle”. The correct collocation here is “comfortable lifestyle”.
There are many typographic errors in this essay, such as “associateted”. Generally, in the IELTS exam, one-time mistakes are considered as “slips”, and they will not hamper your final score too much (unless they occur very frequently).
However, repeated errors like “populas” are treated differently. There is no English word like that, only “popuplation”, or “populace”, with the former being much more prevalent. It looks the author is trying too hard to paraphrase the keyword “population”, without any success.
The phrase “the governments should promote smaller towns as an alternative for major cities” is ambiguous. It is not clear who should use smaller towns instead of using major cities (“citizens”).
Although, the people living in populated areas are able to avail lucrative great oppurtunities opportunities in fields terms of education, employment and enterntainment entertainment somehow, there are some issues to be dealth dealt with. First of all, the most nototrious notorious one is; traffic congestion, as the number of vehicles on roads is increasing, and there is no solution to it yet. Causing air and noise polution pollution, it is the greatest drivers a major factor in manipulating undermining human's mental and physical health. Another worth mentioning worry is, unemployment. As more and more people are leaving their hometowns in search of jobs; the city populas population is swelling increasing up day by day.
Don’t use a comma right ater a “to be”, or a subordinating conjunction (like “although”). Usually, a comma is used to separated two clauses.
“Lucrative” does not go along with “opportunity”.
The correct word choice here is “in terms of”, not “in fields of”, as shown in Google Ngram.
“Swelling” means “become bigger in size”, not “an increase in terms of number or amount”. A population isn’t something like a cake, it doesn’t have a definite size.
The author has provided two issue of urban life: traffic and unemployment. Each idea is also supported by a following sentence.
As far long as the government role is concerned, it seems that it could help lessen the problems faced by urban habitants dwellers. To illustrate, the authorities should start housing schemes in smaller towns to divert public attention towards smaller towns. Also, providing health and job facilities within one's hometown could persuade people to stay there more. In addition to this, factories and hospital buildings ahould should be moved into remote areas to support rural living lives.
“As far as” means “for as great a distance as”. The correct word choice is “as long as”.
“Habitant”, or “inhabitant” do not go with “urban”. Most of the time, “urban dweller” is the correct choice, as shown in Ngram. If you are not sure which is the correct term, then even an elementary choice like “city people” is fine. Making mistakes is much, much worse that using a non-advanced word.
To conclude, infact in fact people do fantasize about living in larger cities; to dwell among advanced living standards, but when after after when moving in, they have to encounter certain problems. To tackle the situation, government governments should step in, and design solid propose schemes to stop urban crawl urban growth. It should initiate implement plans to ease urban inhabitants dwellers, and inspire them to move into smaller settlements.
This conclusion is consistent with the ideas in two Body Paragraphs. This means a decent score in terms of Coherence.
When talking about “scheme” as in “policy’, then the correct collocation is not “to design a scheme”, but rather “to propose a scheme”. And this word does not go along with “solid”.
Words: 265.
Overall: 6.0
Task Response: 7
addresses all parts of the task (the author has written more than 250 words, and answered all the topic questions)
presents a clear position throughout the response (the conclusion is clear and on-point)
presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to overgeneralise and/or supporting ideas may lack focus
Coherence and Cohesion: 7
logically organises information and ideas; there is clear progression throughout
uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use (“despite”, “although”, “first of all”, “another”, “to illustrate”, “also”)
presents a clear central topic within each paragraph (the author developed each paragraph with a topic sentence and some branching sentences)
Lexical Resource: 5
uses a limited range of vocabulary, but this is minimally adequate for the task
may make noticeable errors in spelling and/or word formation that may cause some difficulty for the reader (various spelling errors leads to a 5 here)
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 5
uses only a limited range of structures attempts complex sentences but these tend to be less accurate than simple sentences
may make frequent grammatical errors and punctuation may be faulty; errors can cause some difficulty for the reader (there are many punctuation errors)
(This essay correction is done by Anh Tran - an administrator of Let’s Write Something.)
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WRITING TASK 1
Dear Mr Tanvir,
Having worked under your supervision for more than 4 years, I have certainly learnt a great deal about our company and my roles as a product development team member. I am writing to show my appreciation and to seek your permission to work in our head office in Sydney, Australia.
Recently, I have come to know about a 6-month program, which is about to start in a few weeks at our company head office, focusing solely on “niche product development techniques” for new recruits. The program may have been designed for the new talents of our company, but I feel like a seasoned employee like me would also be able to benefit a lot from such initiative that doesn’t really come by every now and then.
I have already arranged for a couple of very talented interns to help our team. I have also requested other team members of my team to take the additional responsibilities in my absence, and they all agreed. Moreover, I will be able to communicate and help my team over the phone and emails whenever required.
Now, only if you are kind enough to take the lead in arranging a transfer to the head office by citing my reasons for it to the upper management, should I be able to join the program in due time.
Thank you for your help in advance.
Yours sincerely,
WRITING TASK 2
Many businesses have discovered that new employees often lack the communication skills. This can be attributed to an excessive focus on professional skills in college and a weak foundation in the language since childhood. These issues can be resolved through extensive reforms in the education system.
The primary focus of most colleges and universities is to train students for technical tasks. There are almost no teachers and courses in communication skills since these are considered irrelevant for engineers, accountants, and doctors. Consequently, many fresh graduates have no idea how to communicate with their colleagues. Moreover, the education system from elementary studies to university focus on science and mathematics as these subject are supposed to build careers. Languages, which for the core of communication skills, are considered mere necessary evils that need to be crammed. The students prefer to just pass the exams in English, French, German and Latin and are expected to excel in sciences. This creates a poor foundation for communication skills and most new employees find it impossible to talk to their teammates.
I think this issue can only be resolved through a radical restructuring of the education system. Boards of education, such as the CBSE in India, along with schools and teachers need to inform students and parents about the utility of communication in building strong careers. Moreover, the courses in literature should be made more interactive so that the students abandon the habit of cramming. This can be done through videos and role-plays. Colleges should allocate subjects dedicated to improving the speaking, writing, listening and reading skills of students. They should be encouraged to write letters, essays on contemporary topics.
In conclusion, the problem of poor communication skills has cropped up due to the extreme focus on technical skills and poor foundation in literature. This can be solved through the active collaboration of educational institutions, teachers, parents, and students.
Finding the perfect balance of technical and interpersonal skills are getting difficult these days. Though it is still easier to get people with excellent analytical or technical expertise but finding talent along with interpersonal skills, is a tough task. This essay will discuss the causes of the lack of interpersonal skills and possible solutions to it.
The problem arises when the employee is not passionate about the job he/she is doing. Firstly, it’s essential for an employee to feel the motivation towards the job he is doing, in today’s world, people treat their job as just the source of income. Even the fresh talent doesn’t have that zeal to pursue the career passionately, for them, the job is all about finishing the daily working hours for which they are being paid. Secondly, it also depends on the employers, what efforts they are putting in to motivate their employees. In most of the cases, employees are just bothered about their own business goals rather than thinking about employee benefits, rewards and recognition. In short, to expect better productivity both in terms of technical and interpersonal skills, both employee and employer need to put in equal efforts.
Value for money is decreasing day by day — the young generation demand for what additional an organisation can offer apart from the handsome pay package. The first solution to the problem is to have a proper team building programmes introduced by the human resources department that may involve team outings and team activities to enhance the interpersonal skills of an individual. Studies show that 80% of employee feel more engaged with their work when they have a robust social network in the workplace. The second solution to motivate an employee is to introduce different rewards and recognitions on a different level of employment that can only be achieved via team activities. By doing this, the employer will be able to force their people to develop strong interpersonal skill.
This essay discussed both the causes and solutions of a lack of interpersonal skills in employees. A delicate balance between both the skills can take any organisation to the zenith.
Dear Sandeep,
I have been working as a Sales Capability Manager with Mars Pvt. Ltd since 5 years and, it has been a great learning experience under your supervision.
Recently, I check on our company portal that there is a 6 months project being launched next month on Route To Market expansion at our Head office in Mclean USA. As you are aware, I am looking for a role change and this project will help build my capabilities for my next move.
I have aligned my Peer team members for their help to get my work done, also I will carry my laptop and work remotely. Trust work will not be impacted. Need your help in getting me enrolled for this project.
Thanks
Now a days employers find plenty of fresh employees lack essential abilities and cooperation to work with the team .I believe this process is led my lack of education and incomplete hiring process .This gap can be tackle by academic course and altering hiring standards.
To begin with countless workers lack of ability to work with each others which is cause by school only focusing on academic oriented environment ,As school deprive their chances to learn team work with their class mates .For example when I was in school teachers advice us concentrate only on achievements and do not waste time any thing else. Moreover another factors employers hiring process is depend on employees their grades marks in university. Therefore the education systems and hiring procedure to bring this issue force pupils to pay massive attention to learning books knowledge.
Furthermore to solve this issue to start extracurricular activities in schools for example painting ,dancing ,sports make students to learn basic skills meaning that require team sprit to taking part in activities .For instance taking part in leadership games and public speeches make them confidence and raise leadership quality skills and also improve relationship with team mates and colleague.
The fact is business use different methods to select candidates enquire work experiments as it makes candidates not only focus on books .Thus altering the minority of part from the school system of business hiring process make huge change in new employees.
To summarize due to inadequate educational structure and unsuitable evaluation of new workers ,they lack essentials skills of cooperation .As it can be tackle by improving extracurricular activities and amending the assessment of new employee.
Dear Sir /Madam
I am writing this letter to express interest to have training period of six month in United States head office.
To begin with let me explain to you I have just finished my Microsoft certification theory exam and would like to have practical experience and to get trained in server administration Hence I did some research on internet and it has come to my attention our main branch has ideal location to get training requirement done .
Therefore , I have kindly request you sir to grant permission to get training complete at our head office .Moreover it would be nice if you can arrange training requirements it will be ease to me to transfer the knowledge between our head office staff .
I have trained Mrs .Sameera to cover up my duties until I come back .In addition I will be in loop ,to have close contacts with my clients even though I am working in head office .
I would appreciate your immediate response to this letter and look forward to hearing from you .
your sincerely
Khalid
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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months
say how your work could be done while you are away
ask for his/her help in arranging it,
You should write at least 150 words.
Dear Sir,
I am writing you this letter to inform you that I am requesting for a work transfer in one of the Head Offices, particularly, in Singapore as soon as possible. This may seem hard for me to move to another location because I have some hectic schedules and loaded meetings with our clients ,Unfortunately, I really need to depart temporarily for only six months due to personal reason.
My husband has been admitted in one of the Hospitals in City of Singapore and it would be likely that he is going stay there in a couple of months until he gets well. Very timely, our Headquarter is nearby the location and so if I render my work there for a half year, I may be able to take care of my husband and visit him in the hospital during my break time and after work.
Since I am away, I can still contact them through a video call to expedite the meeting in order avoid other work conflicts with our customers.
Would you kindly help me on how to settle my request in a shorter period of time as well as advise me what other things you require in order for my work transfer to be approved immediately.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Sincerely Yours,
MJ
Social skills are very important not only with friends or family you know, but it is also equally important to make you become a good leader toward your career. However, most of the young peoples are lacked communication skills and we will discuss the causes in this essay.
First of all, in this digital age of the internet, the technology has changed human’s communication method. Most of the young peoples prefer to communicate via technology and this ultimately caused on reducing the interaction within colleagues and friends.
Besides, neither education system in Malaysia nor parents usually pay less attention on the communication’s development of the children. Subjects such as public speaking, interpersonal skill and cooperative skills seldom teach in the schools, and this has caused the negative impacts on confident level among Childs in connection to social skills.
Technology devices should be used moderately, while over depending on technology to the daily life will seriously affected the relationship and miscommunication within peoples. By having physical meeting and increasing number of frequencies of meeting with all the staffs will help to improve these conditions. Some of the corporate even organise certain activities such team building to the staffs to improve the interaction among staffs and encourage communication within them.
Finally, parents and education system equally playing indispensable roles to help on improving young generations’ interpersonal skills. This can be done by providing related subjects as the compulsory to be learned in the school.
In conclusion, social skills are imperative to succeed in career, but this can be solved with time and practice just like others skill.
WRITING TASK 1
Dear Mr. X,
I have been working in your team for last 4 years as a Senior Software Engineer. Over the last 4 years I have learnt many aspects of developing highly scalable systems and you might know I am the only member in your team who passed problem solving certification exam conducted by company.
Yesterday I got an email regarding "Expert Problem Solver Training" sent from company HQ. This training will be started within few weeks and last for 6 months. Employees who are interested must have previous certifications to get a chance for this training and have to stay at company HQ located at Sydney, Australia for next 6 months. As I am eligible based their requirements I am seeking your help to move to HQ and start the training.
I have already informed my team members to take additional responsibilities while I stay abroad. Moreover my plan is to delegate some responsibilities to other team also. My team members agreed to do so. Besides I will support remotely in critical situations.
So, if you are kind enough to arrange my transfer to HQ for the training, it would provide much benefit for my career in this company. I am expecting you will request to upper management about me citing my previous certifications and my interest.
Regards,
Y
Nowadays many youngsters lack interpersonal skills and this has predominantly impacted few businesses. The reason for this may varu from person to person. Some of the reasons for this may be due to their upbringing, language trouble or a trauma that has affted them greatly.
The first reason may be attributed to their upbringing. Parents these days are opting for one child and are not available during their development stages. With many of them working and for late hours, leave their child to tend to itself. With the number of crimes increasing, most parents are not letting their children out in the open. Most of them are confined to the four walls of their homes. Children these days refuse to interact with others and this resonates to them turning into introverts. The second reason can be due to the language barrier. English is the most preferred langauge for bussiness operations. Most the the employeess may not be fluent in English and may develop some kind of a complex. The third reason may be due to a trauma that has wounded someone so deeply that they find it difficult to interact and have a basic conversation with people.
A possible solution would be for schools to include a couple of interpersonal skills in their syllabus. Teachers should be able to identify a child who is finding difficulty in communicating and provide necessary support. Schools should also give assignments which invloves interacting with people. Regular counselling is another way to help identify if there is any problem with the child. Many offices these day also have counsellors who can provide guidance. Companies have mandatory trainings that the employees should partake. Skill development should be made mandatory. Companies can also invite achievers in various field and have them talk about their experience which might help someone. Motivational speeches are said to be effective and might help improve their overall outlook.
The above solutions can be considered to improve communication skills.
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Various organisations analyse that their neophyte workers are deficient with very basic social values those are fundamental to be a good human. These primary virtues defined as milestone for a successful business and better environment. This essay will first discuss diverse causes and then look at most viable solutions to mitigate with this complication.
To initialise with, materialistic approach is the diminishing factor contributing to selfishness irrespective of others situation even when your desire is somebody’s need. Additionally, less socialising activities because of much absorption in technological gadgets and online virtual friends contribute to shortening of moral codes those must for progressive society. Therefore, an attitude of looking own benefits and getting promotions by pressing other’s shoulders is referred as a new cooperative skill by newcomers.
To eradicate this problem from workplaces, the small but necessary steps should be undertaken from the early age of schooling by involving adolescent in different extra-curriculum activities that keep their basic skills of cooperation and teamwork under vigilance. Furthermore, these must include as an indispensable subject to be completed successfully for further study and motivate them to take part in sports activities where a group has to be succeeded for winning like in cricket and soccer that set examples of these values every year.
Conclusively, there is no doubt different sets of interpersonal skills are disappearing in today’s generation but with implementation of proper guidance among newcomers and arrangement of different programs at regular time in business firms can bring stupendous outcomes within corporate world. Moreover, technological sources can be used as a learning method for imbibing these primary codes and practising in real life for betterment and peace of mind.