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How to Improve Sentence Quality While Attempting Writing Task 2?

How to Improve Sentence Quality While Attempting Writing Task 2?

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Many students wonder how it would be possible for them to improve band score in writing and speaking. They have a vague idea of what is lacking in their skills that restricts their score to below band 7. Sentence structure is an essential element of assessing skills, especially in writing. If you can improve the structure of a sentence, you would see the difference it makes. Let’s take an example,
Role of technology is important nowadays. Some people think technology has lots of benefits. Other people think that technology has many disadvantages. It will cause more harm to humans.
This example explains how sentences are though correct grammatically but are not impressive enough for good band score as it contains simple sentences that lack connectivity and flow. Now look at the example below,
Nowadays, technology has a major role to play in the life of humans. According to some people, there are various benefits associated with the use of technology. However, there are other people who believe that use of technology can prove to be detrimental to the mankind and nature.
This explanation, on the other hand, is quite effective as it uses complex structure with the use of sentence connector and good vocabulary.


How to improve a sentence structure?

There are different ways of improving the structure of a sentence to make it better, effective and impressive enough leading to good band score.

1. Use of Sentence Connectors

Lack of connectivity between the sentences represents lack of flow in the ideas or thoughts. Hence, making use of sentence connectors in between the sentences would add quality in your writing. Examples of sentence connectors are:

  • Moreover,
  • On the other hand,
  • In contrast to this,
  • In addition to this,
  • However, etc.

Note: Avoid using these connectors excessively which would otherwise lower the impression of your writing.

2. Use of synonyms

One of the effective means of improving a sentence is when you replace normal words with synonyms to improve quality of writing.
For example,
Replace “like” with “such as

Replace “help” with “assistance

Replace “give advice” with “provide suggestion

Replace “I want to tell you” with “I would like to inform you
Note: Using vocabulary or synonyms incorrectly brings negative impression. Hence, always use the words about which you are comfortable with and learn the complex vocabulary thoroughly before using in your writing.

3. Convert simple to complex sentences

Co-education schools are good for the kids. They learn more effectively. They also gain more understanding of the outside world.
The above statement consists of three simple sentences, but look at the below statement:
It is considered that co-education schools are the best institutions for children as in these schools, they are not only able to learn more effectively here but also gain better understanding of living in the outside world.
In this statement, you find all three statements are joined to form a complex sentence which is comparatively effective.

You can use complex sentences using words such as even though, although, however, but, because, if, in order to etc.

Using complex sentences is a sign of advanced level of English. If you can incorporate or master the art of using complex sentences without making any grammatical mistakes, you are bound to score 7 band or even abovre.

Exercise:

  1. Living in a house is good. But living in an apartment brings problems.
  2. People become independent when teachers teach them finance course.
  3. Attending party is important to make interaction with people.
  4. I do not want to dependent on public transport. I want to own my own car.
  5. I did a lot of trips during in the past. Staying at home was boring. I preferred going out on weekend.
  6. I would like to talk about a restaurant is Taj restaurant. It is my favourite.
  7. Computer is an electronic device. It is being used every day for different purposes.
  8. I saw an accident. It happened yesterday. Bus driver was very fast driving. It hit a car suddenly.
  9. I read newspapers daily because it will give more accurate news. We can get what happens in the world.
  10. All parents should teach their children well. Children learn mannerism from parents.

Answer Key:

  1. As compared to staying in a house, living in an apartment brings problems.
  2. On learning finance course taught in the institutions by teachers, people become independent.
  3. Attending party is important as we can interact with many other people there.
  4. Since I do not want to be dependent on public transport, I want to own a car.
  5. I had enjoyed going to a lot of trips in the past since staying at home was boring and thus I used to prefer going out on the weekend.
  6. I would like to talk about my favourite restaurant which is Pizza Hut.
  7. Computer is a useful electronic device as it is being used every day for various purposes.
  8. I saw an accident that happened yesterday when a bus driver who was driving very fast suddenly hit a car.
  9. I read newspapers daily because it provides accurate news of what happens in the world.
  10. Children can learn a lot from parents who can teach them well about mannerism.

Many students wonder how it would be possible for them to improve band score in writing and speaking. They have a vague idea of what is lacking in their skills that restricts their score to below band 7. Sentence structure is an essential element of assessing skills, especially in writing. If you can improve the structure of a sentence, you would see the difference it makes. Let’s take an example,
Role of technology is important nowadays. Some people think technology has lots of benefits. Other people think that technology has many disadvantages. It will cause more harm to humans.
This example explains how sentences are though correct grammatically but are not impressive enough for good band score as it contains simple sentences that lack connectivity and flow. Now look at the example below,
Nowadays, technology has a major role to play in the life of humans. According to some people, there are various benefits associated with the use of technology. However, there are other people who believe that use of technology can prove to be detrimental to the mankind and nature.
This explanation, on the other hand, is quite effective as it uses complex structure with the use of sentence connector and good vocabulary.


How to improve a sentence structure?

There are different ways of improving the structure of a sentence to make it better, effective and impressive enough leading to good band score.

1. Use of Sentence Connectors

Lack of connectivity between the sentences represents lack of flow in the ideas or thoughts. Hence, making use of sentence connectors in between the sentences would add quality in your writing. Examples of sentence connectors are:

  • Moreover,
  • On the other hand,
  • In contrast to this,
  • In addition to this,
  • However, etc.

Note: Avoid using these connectors excessively which would otherwise lower the impression of your writing.

2. Use of synonyms

One of the effective means of improving a sentence is when you replace normal words with synonyms to improve quality of writing.
For example,
Replace “like” with “such as

Replace “help” with “assistance

Replace “give advice” with “provide suggestion

Replace “I want to tell you” with “I would like to inform you
Note: Using vocabulary or synonyms incorrectly brings negative impression. Hence, always use the words about which you are comfortable with and learn the complex vocabulary thoroughly before using in your writing.

3. Convert simple to complex sentences

Co-education schools are good for the kids. They learn more effectively. They also gain more understanding of the outside world.
The above statement consists of three simple sentences, but look at the below statement:
It is considered that co-education schools are the best institutions for children as in these schools, they are not only able to learn more effectively here but also gain better understanding of living in the outside world.
In this statement, you find all three statements are joined to form a complex sentence which is comparatively effective.

You can use complex sentences using words such as even though, although, however, but, because, if, in order to etc.

Using complex sentences is a sign of advanced level of English. If you can incorporate or master the art of using complex sentences without making any grammatical mistakes, you are bound to score 7 band or even abovre.

Exercise:

  1. Living in a house is good. But living in an apartment brings problems.
  2. People become independent when teachers teach them finance course.
  3. Attending party is important to make interaction with people.
  4. I do not want to dependent on public transport. I want to own my own car.
  5. I did a lot of trips during in the past. Staying at home was boring. I preferred going out on weekend.
  6. I would like to talk about a restaurant is Taj restaurant. It is my favourite.
  7. Computer is an electronic device. It is being used every day for different purposes.
  8. I saw an accident. It happened yesterday. Bus driver was very fast driving. It hit a car suddenly.
  9. I read newspapers daily because it will give more accurate news. We can get what happens in the world.
  10. All parents should teach their children well. Children learn mannerism from parents.

Answer Key:

  1. As compared to staying in a house, living in an apartment brings problems.
  2. On learning finance course taught in the institutions by teachers, people become independent.
  3. Attending party is important as we can interact with many other people there.
  4. Since I do not want to be dependent on public transport, I want to own a car.
  5. I had enjoyed going to a lot of trips in the past since staying at home was boring and thus I used to prefer going out on the weekend.
  6. I would like to talk about my favourite restaurant which is Pizza Hut.
  7. Computer is a useful electronic device as it is being used every day for various purposes.
  8. I saw an accident that happened yesterday when a bus driver who was driving very fast suddenly hit a car.
  9. I read newspapers daily because it provides accurate news of what happens in the world.
  10. Children can learn a lot from parents who can teach them well about mannerism.

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what you guys doing

Kaviyavijay

Healthcare is the backbone to all the conutries. The mixture of both poor people and rich people in the county, i competly agree that government should spend money for hospitiality. I will discuss and elaborate in below paragraph

Firstly, i firmly agree that administration are not supplying medicine to the needy, they should provied free treatment to all citizens instead of spending alot of money in establishing unwanted Bridge, Art works, Alcohol, they can increase prime cost to medicial system. For instance (In India, the tamilnadu introduced free health check up for elder citizen ) the health minister come up with free therapy to the needy and it is much useful while the medical products are extortionate to buy so, the can decrease the value of budget immaterial goods.Eventually Health minister should coordinate with richest country like Russia, America, Dubai and Australia to import the equipment for treatment and supply to every hospital mainly in Urban area's.

Secondly, in Canada , United State of America and Germany are offering cashless treatment ,However they are collecting high tax for travel tax, sin tax and payroll. The cabinet give major roll to the prime cost for hospitailites could lower the cost of death who are all unable to pay.

In conclusion the body of health plays major roll to each and everyone's life the government should export medical equipment and price should be affortable to buy based on their income. The government should be active in scheme of free health services system.

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Can anyone please help me review my writing task one and let me know what band it can fit into. thankyou in advance.

Musa

can anyone review my essay and give me band from 0 to 9

Musa

Some people think living in big cities is bad for people's health.Living in big cities can be dangerous for health but in big cities ,there are large numbers of facilities that is not available in villages or small towns such as hospitals .In cities there are variety of hospitals with all facilities of proper treatment Especially The equipments or machines that can be use in treatment.

I agree that living in big cities is dangerous for health ,especially for older peoples because there is lot of noise in big and rush places and big cities are always a busy place and the noises coming from vehicles effect their health in certain ways because at that age they want peace in their lives .A little bit of noise irritates them and also usually in big cities ,Environmental pollution is very common that can also effect their health badly especially attack on breathing cycle.

But in some aspects. i support to live in big cities due to their wide range of facilities .For example if someone would have serious problem and there is need to take them to hospital and at that time he immediately need a treatment but the cure is not available on that time what would you do if you are living in small town or village but if you're living in city then there is no problem because they have variety of private and public hospitals of all type of machinery and treatment and specialist doctor available at 24 hours in emergency.And also in my family this was happened when my uncle had heart attack and at that time we were living in small town.when we went to the hospital in our town ,they said to us that you have to take him in big city hospital because we don't have any treament and they told us that you would have to take as early as possible this is why i prefer to living in big city because i don't consider as much effect on peoples living in big cities but i mentined few causes above that is in my point of view.

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Aniket Hankare

Hi, this is my first writing mock, can please someone guide me & let me know how am I supposed to structure it more eloquently?


Here in the given table, it showcases the the amount of waste production done by the major 6 countries over a period of 20 Year.

From the past 20 years, starting from 1980 to 2000, these six countries have constantly been increasing their waste production.

A surprising fact is that are some countries like Ireland & Korea who haven't produced any amount of waste production in specific years.
US has been a major contributor for the production of waste over the years and have always surpassed its contribution from the past 20 years

Talking about Korea, you can see a gradual decrease in the amount of waste production from the year 1990 to 2000 which is a good sign, unlike US, their production of waste keeps increasing at an accelerated rate.

A special consideration for Poland, as the production of waste starting from 1980 to 2000 has minimal growth if compared to others.

Anonymous

Very good practise series got L:7.5,W:6,R:8,S:6.5 Overall 7

mallika

The bar chart provides the information about leisure time enjoyed by males and  females of five employement's status. units of measurements is in ''TIME''.
Overall, males enjoying constant time in sectors of unemployed and retired whereas, there is no males in the the employed part time and housewives as we can see in the given diagram.
To begin with, males who are in employed for full time has nearly fifty hours time to relax. the men who are unemployed and retired has exactly 80 hours leisure time in a week.
However, females who are working full time has nearest to forty five hours time to enjoy  themselves and also the women's who are working part time has more than 40hours free time moreover, the ladies who are unemployed and retired has same time of 70 hours gents crossed ladies in this two sectors finally, housewives has crossed half of the time to spend their time with family members.

Ceren
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