IELTS Mock Test 2023 March 雅思写作真题 1
Question list
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Some people say free time activities for children should be organized by parents. Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
You should write at least 250 words.
评论:
It is often argued by some that it is the duty of guardians to arrange activities to be taken by boys and girls in their spare time, while others believe that they ought to select by themselves .In my opinion, I think avoiding unnecessary misbehaviour by choosing what children should play is a positive trend.
On the one hand, advocates of selecting specific undertakings for kids do so because this will keep them in line with their beliefs and customs and I agree. In other words, every family have its own values that should be followed, therefore monitoring what juveniles will be doing in their leisure time is necessary, especially nowadays of technological advancement. For instance, when a kid is playing on the internet if not monitored they will end up watching things that are not suitable for them, hence the need to choose appropriate ones.
On the other hand, some individuals believe that boys and girls ought to have freedom of what hobbies they want to do in their free time since this will instil the skill of independence. This is because children will not depend on their parents for ideas ,instead they will explore by themselves which is good for their development. Consequently, their self-esteem will be high and it is essential as they grow older. For example, a number of juveniles have discovered their talents when they do experiments during their leisure time which most probably their parents would not have approved.
To conclude, training kids in the way you approve is quite necessary as this will mould them in the way that is respectful ad upheld by society , thus the reason why guardians should make sure they are playing positively during their leisure time.
The table compares the amount of annual milk produced in four countries between 1990 and 2010.
It is clear that the Netherlands has maintained the highest level of milk production capacity for 20 years. Australia is the only country where production of milk has been declining, contrary to the overall upward trend in the other three countries.
During these 20 years, over 11.1 million litres of milk were produced annually in Netherlands, with no significant fluctuations, ahead of other countries. Australia, which once had the same milk productivity as the Netherlands, had a gap of less than 50 thousand litres in quantity in 1990 and 2000, but this gap was widened to more than 20 million litres in 2010.
Both Tanzania and Guatemala had about doubled production of milk in the first decade. However, in the second decade, the amount of milk produced did not increase considerably in Tanzania, while in Guatemala it saw a rise by as much as two-thirds. Although capacity of annual milk production in Guatemala has more than tripled in 20 years, from 26 thousand litres to 84 thousand litres, it still does not reach the level of Tanzania 20 years ago.
Please be sure to let me know if I make grammatical mistakes or mis formulations, or if you have any changes to my essay.
这篇文章在表述论点和展开论证方面有些不足，有时缺乏清晰性和逻辑性。文章中的词汇比较基础，偶尔出现拼写错误和构词错误。语句结构有时尝试了复杂句，但出现一些错误，需要更多的练习。
为提高成绩，建议更注重以下几个方面：
1.更明确表达论点，确保论点具有一致性和充分性；
2.更好地组织文本，使用更丰富的衔接手段；
3.将词汇范围扩大到更高级别的词汇，注意拼写和构词的正确性；
4.尝试不同类型的语法结构和复杂句子，但需要避免常见的语法错误。
最后，建议多做几个练习，可以参考更多的雅思写作样例和评分标准来提高自己的写作能力。