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New Mock Test Aug 2017 - Writing Practice Test 2

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WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about  20  minutes on this task.

The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least  150  words.

WRITING TASK 2

Write about the following topic. 

Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students.

Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 

SAMPLE WRITING TASK 1

The line graph compares the average price of a barrel of oil with the food price index over a period of 11 years.

It is clear that average global prices of both oil and food rose considerably between 2000 and 2011. Furthermore, the trends for both commodities were very similar, and so a strong correlation (93.6%) is suggested.

In the year 2000, the average global oil price was close to $25 per barrel, and the food price index stood at just under 90 points. Over the following four years both prices remained relatively stable, before rising steadily between 2004 and 2007. By 2007, the average oil price had more than doubled, to nearly $60 per barrel, and food prices had risen by around 50 points.

A dramatic increase in both commodity prices was seen from 2007 to 2008, with oil prices reaching a peak of approximately $130 per barrel and the food price index rising to 220 points. However, by the beginning of 2009 the price of oil had dropped by roughly $90, and the food price index was down by about 80 points. Finally, in 2011, the average oil price rose once again, to nearly $100 per barrel, while the food price index reached its peak, at almost 240 points.

(Band 9.0)

SAMPLE WRITING TASK 2

There is a common belief that international student exchange programs would bring benefits to all participants. Despite some obvious disadvantages of this projects, I believe that there are outweighed by the advantages.

On the one hand, there are several major drawbacks when teenagers go overseas. Firstly, those exchange programs cost a considerable amount of money, which a handful of students may be inaccessible. For example, students who come from developing countries would find difficult to apply student exchange programs in industrial nations because of the financial burden. Secondly, even with preparation and knowledge about the new environment, adolescents could still experience culture shock, which can affect them in different ways. Another potential drawback is health issues that can occur during the stay in a foreign country.

On the other hand, I believe that the benefits are more significant than such disadvantages. One reason for this notion is that international visitors would have a shinier resume which is valuable for them in the years to come. By working in foreign organizations, they will gain many practical experience that make their profile more competitive. Another reason is that teenagers would have a chance to experience culture exchange. This broaden their mind, and also helps them make new friends for a lifetime. Additionally, after finishing the program, overseas students tend to obtain more opportunities to find good jobs because they have a strong network of friends.

In conclusion, I would argue that the advantages of international student exchange programs are more significant than the disadvantages.

(Band 6.0)

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Corrected Writing Task 2

There is a common belief that international student exchange programs would bring benefits to all participants. Despite some obvious disadvantages of this projects those programs’ disadvantages , I believe that there they are outweighed by cannot undermine the advantages.

  • Avoid using adjectives or adverbs that show high levels of certainty, such as “obvious” or “evidently”.

  • The word “outweigh” is already used in the topic question. “The disadvantage undermines the advantage” is a good collocation.


On the one hand, there are several major drawbacks when teenagers go overseas. Firstly, those exchange programs cost a considerable amount of money, which a handful of students may be inaccessible the expensiveness of various exchange programs makes them inaccessible to many students . For example, students who come from developing countries would find difficult to apply student exchange programs in industrial nations because of the financial burden difference in living standards between nations . Secondly, even with preparation and knowledge about the new environment, adolescents could still experience culture shock, which can affect them in different ways . Another potential drawback is health issues that can occur during the stay in a foreign country Health issues occur during the stay in a foreign country is another common problem among exchange students .

  • While joining two sentence clauses into one sentence by using “which” is a good strategy in the Speaking test, it isn’t necessarily effective in writing contexts. Try to change the original complex sentence into a short, simple sentence.

  • The third sentence in Paragraph 1 is kinda unclear and redundant. The idea of “financial burden” is already expressed in the previous sentence.

  • “Different ways?” Which ways are you referring here? Try to explain it more to make the paragraph longer and more cohesive.

  • Try to use the connectives (firstly, secondly, another…) more skillfully. If you keep putting a connective at the start of a sentence, then your writing can be very dull. I advise you to change the structure of the last sentence to make the connective (“another”) appear in the middle of the sentence instead of at the beginning.


On the other hand, I believe that the benefits are more significant than such aforementioned disadvantages. One reason for this notion is that international visitors students would have a shinier attractive resume which is valuable for them in the years to come. By working in foreign organizations, they will gain many practical experience that make their profile more competitive. Another reason is that teenagers would have a chance to experience culture exchange cultural diversity . This broaden broadens their mind , and also helps them make new friends for a lifetime . Additionally, after finishing the program, overseas students tend to obtain more opportunities to find good jobs because they have a strong network of friends wide social circle .

  • “such is an informal word. Use “aforementioned” instead.

  • “An international visitor” means “a tourist”, not “an international student”.

  • “Shiny resume” isn’t a collocation, “attractive resume” is.

  • “Experience” is an uncountable noun, so don’t use “many” here.

  • You don’t make a “lifetime” friend that easily.


In conclusion, I would argue that the advantages of international student exchange programs are more significant than the disadvantages.

  • The above conclusion is unconvincing and too short. Either you write one more sentence, or remove the part “would argue that”.

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Words: 252

  • While it’s okay to write a 252 words essay in a real test, try to write longer when you are at home. You should write approx 270 words, so even after you have trimmed some redundant words, your essay still have more than 250 words.


Overall score: 6.0

  • Task Achievement: 6

addresses all parts of the task although some parts may be more fully covered than others.

presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or repetitive (your conclusion is just a paraphrase of Paragraph 2’s first sentence)

presents relevant main ideas but some may be inadequately developed/unclear (the part “which can affect them in different ways” is clearly an undeveloped sentence clause)

  • Coherence and Cohesion: 7

logically organises information and ideas; there is clear progression throughout. (the ideas in each paragraph aren’t listed in a coherent way)
uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/overuse. (on the one hand, on the other hand; firstly, secondly, another, one reason, another reason, additionally)

presents a clear central topic within each paragraph.

  • Lexical Resource: 6

uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task (overseas, financial burden, culture shocḳ)
attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy (broaden the mind, to experience cultural diversity)
makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 6
uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms.
makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication

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